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In the lecture, the professor casts doubt on the reading passage's idea that purchasing medicine online should be inhibited because it has many drawbacks. The professor asserts that there are more beneficial points than harmful aspects following the subsequent three reasons. First and foremost, according to the reading passage, many people are exposed to unapproved and outlawed medicines online. They can buy untested drugs and herbal remedies, although they are not safe. In opposition to this argument, the professor claims that they can purchase swiftly new medicine through the online store while a prove process regarding new drugs is too long to use new medicine off-line.
On top of that, the reading passage describes how ordering medicine online is dangerous. Even though there are questionnaires on websites, it is not possible for them to prove that the whether the medicine suit for a patient or not. It can lead people to death or critical damage. In contrast, the professor argues that online pharmacies can give crucial information to the patient. Since online forms can connect to medical experts, people can gain a wide range of viewpoints about their disease from specialists.
Lastly, the professor rebuts the reading passage's point that people can order medicine from other countries and thus they can order many amounts of medicine more than the allowance. The writer states that purchasing more than needs causes people to abuse and severe damage. The professor points out that they can save much money by buying medicine online. The lecturer gives an example that the cost of medicine is prohibitively expensive in the USA. Therefore, they can save their lives more than cheaper as they can take medicine from overseas. (more than cheaper가 무슨 뜻으로 작성하신건가요??)
에세이 format에 맞게 잘 작성해주셨습니다. 내용 길이도 참 적당하고, 좋습니다. 다만 개인적으로listening passage의 이야기가 reading passage보다 더 길게 나와야 한다고 생각하는데 (reading은 나와있는 거 summary만 하면되지만, listening은 듣는 것을 토대로 작성하는 것이므로 listening이 더 힘들기 때문입니다) 이 에세이는 reading passage 이야기가 조금 더 긴 편이라 조금 내용 측면에서 별로였던 것 같습니다. 어휘 최대한 다양하게 쓰려고 하신거 같아 좋은데 조금 더 다양하게 작성해주시면 더 좋을 것 같습니다. |