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Some people think that it is better
to use printed material to do research than it is to use the internet. However, In my opinion, There should be more emphasis on Internet rather than printed material. There
are several reasons and examples as follows.
First of all, When people do their research,
using printed material spends much time. People do not know which information
is contained in one printed material. So they have difficulty finding the information they want. For example, While I wrote a
research paper about a chemistry experiment, I made use of books first. But it took lots of time
to pick up an appropriate book due to lack of explanation on a book cover. Then I did my research by searching on the internet next time. Internet showed me related
information so that those methods shorten the time.
Second, the Internet costs less money. During the research, people need a particular
material for their research. Sometimes, the library does not have such material then people have to buy them. Buying printed
material is more expensive than buying an e-book. Or instead of spending money,
we can find useful paper on several websites. For example, Most of the university provides websites including free of charge papers. Those papers
are written by the professor so it contains lots of expertise. And we can buy an e-book in
any online bookstore. People can buy it at a discount of 15 percent.
In this regard, I firmly believe
that it is better to use the Internet to do research for the reasons I mentioned above.
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