■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :governments should reduce its spending on general parks and gardens, arts or scientific research? |
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▶ Your Answer : There are lots of argument about the best aspect that governments choose to reduce using money. I strongly believe that in times of an economic crisis, governments should reduce its spending on general parks and gardens than arts or scientific research. First, public parks and gardens are less useful to citizens. Second, public parks and gardens do not make money to help overcome economic crisis. First of all, parks and gardens are less useful for citizens. While park and public gardens can be used to relieve stress of general public only when the weather is great, arts and scientific researches help general public in more unlimited surrounding situations. For example, art piece of Van Gogh named “stars” and medicine called Tylenol are respectively famous for mental treatment and headache treatment used among normal citizens in America. It can be used to any patients who have a mental disorder or headache, no matter what time it is or how the weather is. However, park and gardens can be used by people during half of the day and only in sunny day. Second, parks and general park do not make money to help overcome economic crisis. Park is a facility that most of countries have in their own country. On the other hand, art and scientific development is unique traits of each country that makes other country to buy products and this situation makes a lot of money for the country. For example, Korea’s modern artistic pattern called “damooni” was used by a lot of artists from other country and made huge money by the private right fee. Moreover, since Korea first developed the gene modifying skills, Korea earned huge amount of money during IMF period and was able to overcome the economic crisis. In conclusion, I strongly believe that governments should reduce its spending in parks and general gardens rather than arts or scientific research during economic crisis. First and foremost, parks and general gardens are less useful to general public. Second, park and general gardens do not make money to help overcome the economic crisis. It is clear that park and gardens are useful only when complex aspects of situation are mixed properly. However, money used in art and scientific research makes a great chance to overcome the economic crisis and increases the standard level of living condition among general citizens. (conclusion이 너무 깁니다. 짧게 줄여주세요.) |
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