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Some people might think that parents in the past are more concerned about their children. However, in my opinion parents are giving more concerns towards their as time goes by. There are two reasons. First, parents at present have more obsession with children's education. Second, It is easier to have a access to various bad news about the world.
To begin with, we are living in the world of competition . All Parents are aware of the fact that getting job, entering to a university, or being hired by major company is like a camel passing through the eye of a needle. Thus, enhancing their children's competitiveness is a major concern that their children must stand out to achieve all those things. In order to do this, they set their priority on children's education. There was a survey conducted by a group of education majors in Seoul University. The purpose of the survey was to understand the view of how they concern about their children. They tracked the view of 200 parents regarding their children's academic performances
Then, the group compared the result with the poll conducted 20 years ago. There was significant difference between the two result. The former survey recorded that parents' priority concern have to do with children's academic performance. However, parents in the latter research showed that they were concerning about themselves after their retirement than their children's education. Parents in the past thought that children should strive their own for their well-being.
On top of that, Parents at present have much exposure to news and coverages about dangers surrounding their children. Due to the development of technology, We can be informed about almost all things around us even bad events like car accidents in school zone and the death of young child killed by murderer. In this regard, It is taken for granted that parents will be more preoccupied with their children's safety than the past. I will take myself as an example to make my point. My mother care me even though I am already 24 years old and she is caring me more as I time goes by. She establish rules on me regarding what time I should be in home. She says that the world is too dangerous for me to be in outside at night. Moreover, Time that I should be back to home changed from 12PM to 10PM after she red a coverage of accident took place in my neighborhood.
To sum up, taking obsession toward children's future well-being and children's safety into consideration, I believe that parents at present are more and more preoccupied with their children as time pass by.
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