Schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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People have different opinions whether schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers. I agree that requiring students to evaluate their teachers is necessary. First, teachers will try to have good classes. Second, evaluating their teachers makes students attend their classes well.
Most of all, teachers will make an effort to provide students with better classes to get a good evaluation. No teachers want to get low evaluation from their students, so evaluating system will encourage teachers to work hard. 적절한 주장과 설명입니다. 선생님들이 나쁜 평가를 받고 싶지 않으니까 더 열심히 할 것이다, 라는 평면적인 설명보다는 구체적으로 "수업을 받는 학생들이 직접 평가하기 때문에 평가를 기반으로 학생들에게 더 잘맞는 수업을 위해 노력할 수 있게 된다" 하는 식으로 좀 더 논제에 대한 insight를 보여주면 좋을 것 같아요. For example, my middle school adapted a system that made students evaluate their teachers when I was a second year. Comparing to my first year, I felt that teachers gave more useful classes. Teachers prepared more and provided various materials so that students did not think classes were boring. All students thought evaluating their teachers was extremely helpful. Teachers were also proud of themselves when they got a good result from students. If my school had not adapted did not adapt this kind of system, I would not have better qualified classes ever. *과거 내용에 대한 가정: If S had pp~ , S 조동사 have pp~. It demonstrates that teachers will work hard when students evaluate them. 적절한 내용의 사레입니다.
Furthermore, students will listen to their classes carefully to evaluate their teachers. Evaluating teachers without participating in classes for students is impossible. Students will think how their teachers express ideas and how they help students understand correctly to evaluate. It leads students to listen to carefully during classes. 평가를 위해서 더 열심히 수업을 듣게 될 것이라는 지적도 적절합니다. For example, I sometimes felt sleep in math classes. However, after my school started to make students evaluate their teachers, I took math classes hard. To fill out an evaluating form about teachers, I had to listen to teachers' lectures well. Teachers were also satisfied with students' participation. I would have slept sleep all the time times during the math class classes if school had not had an evaluating system. It shows that evaluating their teachers gives a chance for students to listen their classes carefully. 적절합니다. 논지와 사례 내용을 연관지어 마무리한 부분도 좋습니다.
In conclusion, I agree that schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers for the reasons that I have mentioned above. First, teachers will make an effort to provide students with better classes to get a good evaluation. Second, students will listen to their classes carefully to evaluate their teachers.
주요 채점기준 (항목별 5-4-3-2-1점수로 30점 만점 자가채점)
논제 파악 effectiveness in addressing the task
적절한 설명 appropriate explanation
적절한 예증, 구체적 설명 appropriate exemplification, details
일관성, 단계적 구성, 주제와의 연관성 unity, progression, coherence
다양한 단어 구사 syntactic variety
적절한 단어 선택, 관용적 표현 word choice, idiomaticity
Writing 0–30 score scale
Good (24–28)
전반적인 내용이 논제에 대한 답변이 되기에 적절합니다. 주장을 brain storming하는 과정에서 논제에 대한 insight를 보여줄 수 있게끔 더 생각해보셔도 좋을 것 같아요. 다양한 주제로 꾸준히 연습해주시기 바랍니다^^ 수고 많으셨습니다. 화이팅!