There is an argument about whether
people should take the time to relax with hobbies or physical activities that
are very different from what they do at work. It is widely accepted by many
people that people do not need to take the time to relax with hobbies or
physical activities. However, I agree with this opinion that taking to time to relax is
good for people. There are two reasons for my opinion: taking the rest time
with hobbies or exercise helps people get less stress or
and people can get a lot of job opportunities
First of all, taking the a rest time with hobbies or exercise helps people get less
stress. This day These
days, stress is enemy for people because it causes several illnesses
such as cancer and leads to a worse quality of life. To be specific, taking the time to relax can keep people’s their health and
prevent health problems. For example, many of studies
revealed that people who take the a rest time with
exercise are healthier
more health than
those who do not. This example clearly makes
proves my opinion: taking
the rest time helps people get less stress.
Secondly, people can get a lot of
job opportunities. Mordern society
prefers a
person who has gets
a lot of experience. To be specific, the rest time provides people to some time to get more experiences. And this experiences brings about many connection with others. Moreoever,
companioes likes person people who have get a lot of experience. And they can get a lot of job and earn a lot of money.
(지칭대상이
명확하지 않습니다.) For instance, I applied to many of companies with my friends.
My friends is better than me about in grade but they he did not
have rest time. However, I had. So many company chose
choosed me not
my friends. This experience supports
my opinion.
Therefore, I agree with this
opinion that taking to time to relax is
good for people: taking the rest time with hobbies or exercise help people get less stress or and people can get a lot of job opportunities.
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