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Universities are full of a variety of various (앞서 of가 들어갔기에 뒤에 of가 오는것은 반복적으로 보일수 있습니다.) facilities. Some are for sports activities, and others are for studying facilities like libraries. Some people insist that universities concentrate their resources into the studying buildings, so there is no need to invest money into on (invest 뒤에 따라오는 전치사는 대부분 on입니다) the sports programs. However, sports are the prerequisite activities for university students, therefore the universities should keep investing into on sports.
To begin with, by playing sports, people can learn some valuable lessons which they cannot do in the classrooms. Sports can give various experiences to students. They can learn how to work as a team, how to compete against others, how to maintain their pace, and so on. (etc는 etcetera의 줄임말인데 이러한 줄임표현은 에세이에 적합한 표현이 아닙니다.) etc. These valuable experiences cannot be taught in classrooms. To be specific, when we play soccer, even if one of our players has the a dominant performance, we cannot win the game without the cooperation. Only if the team members gather together and help one another, we can beat the opponent. Thus, while playing soccer, we become used to cooperate with teammates. (팀원들이라는 표현이 정확할것같습니다) crew members. Teamwork is indispensable in life. Someday, we can capitalize our abilities to cooperate. It is the university that provides students with the opportunities for teamwork.
Next, doing playing (sports는 doing 보다는 playing으로 꾸며져야 합니다) sports actually helps students to study harder. There are studies saying the sound physical condition leads to the good concentration. Therefore, if people build their body or strengthen stamina, they can better focus better (동사를 꾸며주는 부사는 동사 뒤에 와야합니다) on materials when they study. For example, I like to swim once in a while. I usually go to the swimming pool in at school and swim for about an hour. After getting out of the cool water, I feel like I am born again. After swimming, I go to the library and open the books. (booking은 예약을 뜻합니다) bookings. It is the best moment for me to focus on the subjects. Everything looks clear to me, so I can learn faster than ever. If the school’s swimming pool were to be rebuilt into as a library, I could would not be able to (수영장이 도서관으로 지어졌을 가정 하에 쓰는것이기 때문에 집중할수 없었을 것이다 라고 표현됩니다.) concentrate at all.
To sum up, universities should regard the sports as important as studying buildings like libraries. It is because sports provide students with valuable lessons, and help students better concentrate better. As the old saying goes, a sound mind in a sound body. |