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Along with inexorable technological advance, online networking system has become one of the most valuable resources in humanity. More and more people are highly dependent on using the internet for various purposes, and the access to the Internet becomes is becoming a (흐름상 아직까지도 변화하고 있다고 하는 것이 더 자연스러워 보입니다) signigicant issue in almost every contemporary society. Accordingly, some argue that the government needs to invest more on broadening Internet access than developing public transportation systems. On the other hand others claim that the government investment should be more focused on the public transportation. My personal rationale on the issue is that spending more money to expand access to the online networking system has much more significance than investing on public transportation. Among the innumeralbe innumerable (오타주의하세요) reasons, there are two most cogent and logical facets that need to be considered.
The primary fundamental contention behind my rationale is that the access to the Internet becomes crucial in 21st century. As the world is digitalized with dramatic technological improvement, the number of computer users have drastically increased. Needless to say, most computer users these days utilize the Internet which contains a wide range of online services on a daily basis. Since the Internet becomes almost essentially useful tool for various tasks, more works are handled and completed with the Internet with practical conveinece. So, Therefore, (so와 같은 단어는 문장의 첫머리로 좋은 단어가 아닙니다) based on the fact that the wide usage of the Internet, the government definitely should invest huge amount of money on the access to the Internet. If there are is appropriate amount of investment on the Internet access, more people would be able to get the Internet connection, creating numerous benefits. The most noticeble gain is that information sharing becomes much more convenient, thus more people especially living in rural areas can get the information, such as news, quickly and conveniently. From this perspective, investing on access to Internet is essentially important.
An additional aspect that needs to be considered is that the government does not necessarily have to invest huge amount of finance on public transportation. This is mainly because public transportation industry could be financially stabled by fees paid by passengers. For instance, all the passengers need to pay certain amount of fee as they board the public transportation. From this boarding fees which is also same as an individual's investment, the public transportation industry can take a stable position at least on (금전적인 부분에 있어서 라는 뜻이기에 전치사 on이 들어가는게 좋을것 같습니다) financial wise. Surely, it is beneficial for citizens to have better public transportation with more convineint facilities. However, comparing between investment on industry of public transportation and on the valuable Internet access, Internet access is far outweigh in necessity and user rate aspect.
All in all, aforementioned reasons with several examples illustrate my point that investment on access to the Internet is more important than that (비교대상은 investment on access to the internet이기 때문에 investment on public transportation이 올바른 비교대상이 됩니다. investment를 대명사인 that 으로 바꿔 쓰는것이 통상적인 방법입니다) on public transportation. Even if the investment of public transportation is actually necessary, we cannot ignore the significance of the Internet access in this global society. The government evidently should take a serious consideration into investment on access to the Internet for the citizens. |