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Opinions are divided according to whether difficult times (a difficult time 혹은 difficult times가 되어야합니다) in our life lives (여러명의 인생들이기에 life가 아닌 lives가 되어야합니다) gives valuable lessons for the future. I agree that the most experience looked that is considered (관계대명사의 부재는 의미의 와전이나 해석의 어려움을 낳을수 있습니다. 그리고 looked라는 흔한 단어보다 considered라는 단어가 더 좋아보입니다) difficult at the that (at that time은 그 때 라는 뜻의 숙어라고 보시면 됩니다) time becomes (주어는 experience라는 단수형 명사입니다.) a valuable lessons for the future for the with (숫자 앞에 the는 거의 붙지 않습니다. 그리고 for보단 with가 더 좋은 전치사의 선택이 될것 같습니다) two reasons. First, it helps to better deal better (동사를 꾸며주는 부사의 위치는 동사 뒤 입니다) with similar difficult problems in the future. than before. (딱히 쓰시지 않으셔도 됩니다. 굳이 쓰시고 싶으시다면 better를 than 앞으로 끌어오셔서 쓰시면 됩니다) Second, lessons from difficult experience are not to be ignored, but to be remembered for a long time.
To begin with, challenging experience at the time (그때가 어떤 때인지 수식하는 문장이 없기에 부자연스러워 집니다) helps people to overcome similar problems easily in the future. In general, people have faced face (In general을 쓰셨다면 보통 사람들은 마주하다 라고 해석이 되어야 하므로 일반동사가 쓰입니다) lots of problems in the society. At the first time when people face the problem, it could be difficult to cope with the problem. However, If people already have similar experience in the past, (previous는 형용사로 널리 쓰입니다. 과거라는 뜻의 명사인 past가 더 자연스러운 표현이 됩니다) previous, It it (문장의 끝이 아니므로 첫 알파벳이 대문자가 되어선 안됩니다) would be easy easier (두가지 조건을 비교하는 상황이기에 비교급 형용사를 씁니다) for the people to overcome the situation. As an example, my friends could be a good example. One one (As an example을 쓰셨는데 또 다시 my friend could be a good example이라고 반복적으로 example을 사용하셔서 문장이 매우 부자연스러워 졌습니다.) of my friends found a job at a car company when he finished his college. Actually, he was barely able to survive from the (해고로 부터 살아남은 것이기에 전치사 from이 들어가야 합니다) layoffs at the workplace. When the country's economy went into an (경제불황속으로 들어간 것이라고 해석되기에 전치사 into와 단수형 명사앞에 붙는 관사 a나 the가 필요합니다) economic downturn, his company was hit hard. Then substantial numbers of workers were laid off. Naturally, high levels of credential and job experience was required to work at the company. At first, he felt it was difficult to prepare all the credentials for job security. However, those experiences helped him to cope with those kinds of problems better in the future. He always kept a busy schedule, enhancing his competitiveness for job security although his coworkers didn't not (에세이에서 줄임표현은 안쓰시는게 좋습니다) have interest of on (interest 뒤에 붙는 전치사는 항상 on입니다) that. To be (specific은 형용사이므로 동사와 함께 와야합니다) specific, whenever a difficult task came along, he was the first to take it to perform better than other workers. Finally, he overcame his problems about job security by the previous lessons.
Moreover, lessons from demanding experience are more memorable than that those (주어인 lessons가 복수형이므로 that이 아닌 those가 와야합니다) from moderate experience. These days, we can easily get invaluable lessons from lots of sources ranging from the Internet to bookstores. However, it is much more difficult for modern people to remember all the lessons for the future. Moreover, people tend to remember the lessons from demanding and challenging experience well because they get the lesson at the expense of painful experience. As an example, a study conducted in Harvard University shows that the lesson from painful and demanding experience are more remembered more (동사를 수식하는 부사는 동사 뒤에 옵니다) among people than the lesson from plain experience. The study also states that people who spent difficult and challenging childhood have more chance to get success at society because they always remembered the lessons from the experiences. In this regards, difficult experience become valuable lessons for the future.
To sum up, I believe that experience looked difficult at the time becomes invaluable lessons for the future because the lessons help to deal with similar experience better and lessons from challenging experience are more memorable and valuable in the future. |