Both the listening and the reading passage
mainly discuss about the life existence
on Mars. The reading argues that life in some basic forms may exist on Mars. However, the listening casts doubt to on the reading’s
argument by stating that no life exists on Mars.
First of all, the
professor claims that methane isn't always made
by dead plants or animal matters, but it is rather can
be created from volcanic activity. Volcanic activity isn't ceased in Mars, so it is not accurate to think that life
exists in Mars by Methane’s existence. (수동태가 적절하지 않습니다.) This
contradicts to the points made in the passage that existence of Methane
gas shows the existence of some kinds of life.
Secondly, the listening
mentions that it isn't available we cannot know the exact origin of the meteorite. It
is not sure that the meteorite is from Mars. It can be from Earth or any other
planets. This disagrees with the points made in the reading that the meteorite
that is believed to have come from Mars shows signs of having fossilized
bacteria.
Finally, the lecture
asserts that the Martian water is not favorable to life. Most of water is
frozen, and the existence of free-flowing water can't be verified. This is casting doubt to
on the passage’s idea
that the existence of hydrogen and free-flowing water can show the life
presence of Mars.
Writing 0-30 Score Scale
Fair (17-23)
전반적인 에세이를 통해서 글쓴이가 reading과 lecture지문에서 이해한 내용을 잘 풀어서 서술 해 주신 것 같습니다. 주어진 지문들에 대한 내용설명이 잘 되어 있는 편이에요. 하지만 좀 더 디테일하게 설명을 더해도 좋을 것 같습니다. 그리고, 문법적인 부분에서 동사의 시상이나 태를 잘 고려해보시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 불필요한 현재진행형을 쓰거나 부적절하게 수동태를 쓴다면 내용의 흐름에 방해가 될 수 있습니다.
수고하셨습니다.