It is often said
that as the inspection technology dealing with information coming from various
sources is improved, the reliable
amount of (reliable) news and information has
been increased. However, I firmly support the idea that nevertheless(,) there existed(s)
immense (amount of) information which is (with)
unknown about sources. There are two
reasons why: Information technology has significantly increased and the
inspection is not fully adapted. (This is supposed to
be one argument: credibility has not grown fast enough for the growth of the
amount of information. Remember this is crucial, but I will continue with
grammar checking.)
To begin with, the
advancement of Information technology has created huge doubtful (amount of incredible)
information at rapid rate. This is the due to the fact that cyber tools, such as personal blogs, chat
rooms and social networking on the webside
have been people’s new hobbies nowadays.
Not only that, spending (time at) home alone,
today's people tend to attract the attention from others by uploading stimulating (stirring)
rumors. For example, Jun Kim, one of my classmates in the high school, wrote exaggeratedly
an article related to a famous actress. He wrote it in order to (relieve) his
stress by feeling (with) people's attention. However, the article became
disseminated around all over the world. Naturally, the actress got compromised
and sued him for a libel. This implies that with the advent and spread of
information technology, there are vast
untrusting news and information.
(Be
careful with the use of adjective. There is no such thing as “vast” information
for “huge” information. As they both have something to do with amount, be sure
to put what is so vast and huge about information.)
In addition,
information-inspecting method is not perfectly developed and applicable to all the website creating numerous fishy articles in nation. This is attributed to the fact
that inspecting every website is not possible for now, considering today's IT
level. Moreover, the low level of inspection is
one of the main factors to (this) promote(s) serious gossip mostly related to entertainers,
politicians, and artists. According to a study conducted by University of
California at Los Angeles, there was a huge difference between states in the
amount of news stemming from unrevealed source. One group of states had
improved technology that is able to inspect the website at a higher speed. On
the other hand, second group of states had not invested in such technology. The
researchers showed that in second group, the unreliable news had increased by geometric(ally)
progression. This implies that if it
were not for the inspection, today's people have difficulty distinguishing
whether or not the information is true.
(This paragraph
is comparably well-written.)