Group study
*진하게 표시한 부분은 제가 파악한 문단의 주요 내용이니 참고하세요^^
The reading and the lecture both talk about group study. The article says that group study has definite advantages. However, in my opinion, the lecturer argues that students who studied in groups cannot did not find it beneficial.
First, the reading says that group study motivates students to study. On the contrary, the lecturer disagrees with this argument. She claims that students lose lost motivation because when others are were unreliable. For example, members feel felt discouraged when others in their group didn't do not show up regularly or quit coming. Overall, the morale of the team decreases decreased, and people lose lost inspiration. *시제 현재형으로 일치시켜주세요. [서로에게 동기부여를 해준다-오히려 사기가 저하된다]라는 대립구도는 적절합니다.
Second, in the reading, the author says that students learn more when they study together. In contrast, the lecturer counters this opinion. The counter argument is that students would have learned learn more by studying alone. Some students do not didn't know the material well, so they became are likely to distract others from staying focused. distracted. This made it hard for everyone to stay focused. People end ended up chatting and leaving without gaining much knowledge. 더 많은 것을 배운다-아니다 라는 대립구도에 비해 detail설명은 '집중을 방해한다'라는 요지로 연결되어 있기 때문에 흐름이 부자연스럽다는 느낌이 듭니다. 지문 내용을 체크하셔서 어떤 내용으로 대립되는 point를 정리하면 좋을지 고민해보시면 좋을 것 같아요.
The final point made in the reading is that group study saves time. However, the lecturer counters this point by stating that students feel felt that coming and going take took too much time. People had have to stop what they were doing to go to the library and then walk back to their dorms. The whole process takes took up a lot of valuable time. 시간적 효율성과 관련해 대립되는 부분이 잘 정리되어 있습니다.
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Fair - Good (24–26)
통합형 답안은 reading passage와 lecture에서 서로 반박하고 있는 기준을 찾아 그 반박 근거를 일목요연하게 정리하는 것이 목적이므로 노트테이킹한 내용을 적절하게 배치하고 대립되는 부분이 잘 보이도록 글을 구성하는 것이 중요합니다. 현재 글의 경우 전반적인 대립구도나 detail들이 무난하게 잘 정리된 편입니다. 답안과 비교하셔서 어떤 부분에서 노트테이킹이 빠졌는지, 잘못 이해된 부분은 없는지 한 번 더 체크하시면서 어색한 부분들만 다듬어주시면 될 것 같아요. 시제 일치시키는 부분 유의해주시고요^^ 수고 많으셨습니다^^화이팅!