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Some people say that quality of public education has been (public education의 질이 스스로 떨어진것이 아니기에 분사형을 써야합니다.) decreased these days. As a result, teacher evaluating system has implemented in some countries to make teachers work harder (hard의 비교형은 harder 입니다) more hard. In the same vein, some argue that the teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. However, I am against the idea because it will give more stress to students and evaluating how much the students have learned is difficult.
For one thing, teachers should not get a different level of wages because it will make students feel stressed. That is, in order to get more money, teachers will force students to study more and learn more even though they do not want to. Students might want to go out and play, but their teachers will make them to sit down and memorize what they have learned, which makes the students suffer from stress. To illustrate this point, I graduated from a private high school. Once, to gain reputation, the president of the school said that he will give some bonus to teachers whose students get good better grades on the upcoming test. Since then, teachers so cared too much about students' grades that they rarely let them go out and play even at the break times. I and my friend got really stressed out, and one of my friends even went to the hospital due to stress ulcer. As my personal experience shows, the idea of paying teachers in different levels according to students learning level will make students get severe stress.
Also, Moreover, (문단의 시작이 Also로 시작하는 것은 좋지 않습니다.) it is unfair because deciding how much students have learned is not easy. Some students are strong at exams that required choosing one option among several things, and others are strong at explaining and describing in detail about something. The criterion of evaluating the amount that (목적어가 또다른 하나의 문장일 경우엔 접속사인 that, who, which를 써주시는게 더 매끄럽습니다.) students have learned is not clear. To support this point, a study from Korean Educational Research center has shown that around 90 percent of incumbent teachers think how to measure measuring students' studying level is very vague. It also points out that stuents showed different levels of academic accomplishment in different types of tests. This clearly shows the uneasiness of deciding how much students learn.
To make a long story short, the idea of paying teachers differently depending on their how much their students learn is not preferable because of the stress that students will get and difficulty difficulties in measureing measuring the amount of learning. Learning a lot is not the only purpose of school. Why don't just It would be much more beneficial to (먼저 에세이에서는 줄임말을 쓰지 않습니다. 그리고 임팩트 있는 결말을 위해선 주장을 확고히 하는 문장으로 끝내는게 좋을듯 싶습니다) let students to (let + 주어 + 동사원형이 맞는 표현입니다) have some fun at school instead of making them study more.
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