Some people prefer to get up early in the morning and start the day's work. Others prefer to get up later in the day and work until late at night. Which do you prefer?
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Some people think that even though they get up late lately, they like to work until late. However, in my opinion, getting up early is more beneficial for me. This is because it gives me opportunities to focus on my studying and to relax in the evening.
To begin with, morning time is good for me to concentrate on some tasks for me. This is because, in the morning at that times, there is nobody who disturbs me, and there is nothing interrupting me. For instance, I get up 6 AM every morning. After getting get up at the time, I usually prepare about something things I have to do on that day today. At that time, almost my family members are sleeping so that my home is very calm. Moreover, my friends or coworkers do not normally call me at that time. Therefore I can deeply pay attention to my study studying. In addition, my condition is best because I relax and sleep well at last night. On the other hand, when I study at night, my sisters and the noise of Television in the living room interrupt me from concentrating on my study my time. Moreover, my friends call me to meet and hang out with me, which also makes it difficult to focus. It is difficult for me to focus on my tests. Because of such disturbances at night, I am fond of having my own time at from early morning. 아침에 일찍 일어나면 집중해서 일을 할 수 있다는 idea가 적절합니다.
On top of that, when I get up early, I can spend pleasant evening after finishing work in the daytime. If I get up early in the morning and use the time to prepare things well to do today, I can reduce mistakes during while working and can work the tests effectively. Therefore, I am able to finish my work on time. After finishing my tasks successfully, I can have delicious food with the feeling of satisfaction satisfactions, and I can drinking or go to shopping with my friends and family. These evening hours are really fun for me and valuable time to improve improving relationships with my friends and family. However, if I start my daily tasks without preparation time of the morning, I might make much more many mistake, and I could not complete my tasks test on time. It leads lead me to work until late at night so that I can not have a good time with my family and friends. Thus, I believe that a preparation of the morning hours gives me successful outcomes tasks of the day today and free time in the evening. 아침에 하루 일과를 준비함으로써 제시간에 일을 마치고 저녁에 쉴 수 있다는 설명이 단계적으로 잘 제시되어 있습니다.
To sum up, getting up early gives me time to concentrate on something and allows me to relax in the evening comfortably. In this regard, I think that getting up early is better than working until late.
주요 채점기준 (항목별 5-4-3-2-1점수로 30점 만점 자가채점)
논제 파악 effectiveness in addressing the task
적절한 설명 appropriate explanation
적절한 예증, 구체적 설명 appropriate exemplification, details
일관성, 단계적 구성, 주제와의 연관성 unity, progression, coherence
다양한 단어 구사 syntactic variety
적절한 단어 선택, 관용적 표현 word choice, idiomaticity
Writing 0–30 score scale
Good (24–29)
논제가 묻는 내용에 충실히 잘 작성된 답안입니다. 왜 아침을 선호하는지에 대한 이유가 명확하고 그에 대한 설명 역시 단계적으로 잘 구성되어 있습니다. 문법오류나 단어의 부적절한 활용 등(test->task)등에 유의해주시고 가급적 같은 단어를 반복해서 사용하기보다 다양한 단어와 숙어표현을 사용할 수 있도록 연습해주세요. 기출문제 중심으로 다양하게 연습해주시면 될 것 같아요. 코멘트와 채점항목 참고해서 검토해주세요^^수고 많으셨습니다. 화이팅!