■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Do you
agree or disagree with the following statement?
People will have more time for leisure
activities 20 years from now. |
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▶ Your Answer :
To
begin with, there will be more enjoyable activities
due to advanced technologies so people will have more time for leisure
activities 20 years from now. For instance, 20 years ago, there was no Internet, but in
contemporary society, using the Internet is common things. Thanks to the
Internet, we can do a lot of interesting
things while we are having
free time such as playing games or watching movies in everywhere.
Likewise, there will be more creative items to have fun so people will spend
more time for leisure activities in the future. For example, there is fun
activity named VR which makes people experience unreal
world. Even though people are just sitting on the chair wearing the special VR
glasses, they can go anywhere and do anything. This is so ridiculous so this is
the most famous activities in our country. Likewise, this kind of fun
activities are being developed due to unbelievable
advanced techniques, many people will spend more time for leisure activities in
the future.
In
addition, since the world is globalized, many people get accustomed to
traveling compared to they did previously. Thus, in the future, more people
will travel to have time for leisure activities in the future. When people's
demand increase, the price of traveling expense will decrease. Not only that,
there will be more attractive promotions for travelers
to attract. This is leading many people to
travel more and more so in the future, more people will be willing to spend their extra time for traveling. 18 years ago, I
went to Canada for traveling with my family. The price of tickets were 2,000
dollars per person. Furthermore, there were limited options of location and
promotion. However, last year, I went to Canada
again with my friends. The plane tickets were less than previous ones. Also,
there were many options that I could choose.
Therefore, the second travel was more enjoyable because of less worries about
prices and more diverse activities. For these reasons, more people will join
the fun activities because
there were many reasons such as prices and enjoyable activities that they can enjoy.
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