▶ Your Answer : Television provides a variety of contents to people these days. It contains movie film, news, education, and more. Some people claim that the goal of television must be for education. I firmly disagree with the statement for the following two reasons.
To start with, television is not only for students but for every generation of people. In terms of students, the education programs of television are grateful, but other people do not want to see those programs. They prefer watching an entertainment program to watching a boring documentary program. In other words, the purpose of television should be considered the variation of the viewer. For example, when I was a child, television is one of my playing methods. I watched animating movies with my younger brother and played. When I was in high school, the TV turned to be my studying method. I managed to finish my homework by watching the lecture in EBS(the Korean educational broadcasting station). Now I am grown up, I watch the TV as a source of information. Every morning I check the news on the television and prepare the work.
On top of that, educating through television is not efficient. Because of the characteristics of television, it provides the limited information to people. Furthermore, When when (대문자는 문장 시작할 때만 서술하시길 바랍니다) it comes to the field of some study, it is hard to understand at once. To be specific, it is able to provide the sounds, the video clips or the pictures to educate, it is hard to provide every knowledge such as the book does. When I was in high school, I watched TV in high school in order to learn about biology. Although it is good to attract my concentration, I felt hard to understand. There were too many terminologies to understand. If it had been a book, I could have stopped and reviewed, but TV just showed the following information.
In a nutshell, the purpose of television must not be limited for education. This is because it It (this is because는 적절하지 않는 표현 입니다) should consider the diversity of people who watch TV and TV is not efficient for educating. In this regard, I firmly disagree with the statement that the purpose of television should be for education, not for entertainment.
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