■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic :Nowadays people are more
willing to help the people who do not know (For example, giving food and
clothes to the people who need them) than they were in the past.
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▶ Your Answer :
Undoubtedly, helping the people who do not know plays a significant role in people’s daily lives in many
of the places where they work or play. Some people think that nowadays people
are more willing to help the people who do not know than they were in the past,
while others do not. Both sides may have their own reasons to support their
views. If I were asked to choose one, I would say that today’s people are more
willing to help the people who do not know than they were in the past.
To begin with, when people are
willing to help the people who do not know, it can improve the increase in
their overall happiness. Compared to the past, it gives them a chance to devote
themselves to their community and thus they feel fulfilled and rewarded. A fulfilling
and rewarded experience is likely to prevent them from a feeling of meaningless.
For example, when my youngest sister was in high school, she often felt
depressed thinking that her life became an exhausting life. To survive in a
competitive world, she spent the whole day studying all academic subjects,
hoping that she could outdo others. Although she made a constant effort, it was
not easy because everyone was working as hard as she was. Fortunately, she was
able to make her life more meaningful by volunteering help other the poor.
However, our parents did not understand her solution which is helping other
people who do not know because our parents had not ever experienced fulfilled and
rewarded life. (이 부분의 redundancy를 피해주세요!) The reason was that our parents did always work hard (hardly 거의 ~ 않다) and they did
not have enough time to take care about of other people, which led to hard to
experience achieving life. However, when my youngest sister helped other people
to improve the poor people’s lives, she was able to find her fulfilled and
rewarded life. Also, she was able to see the positive results she contributed. Many
people around her started to respect her, allowing her to be strong,
optimistic, and confident. Without this experience, she would have been lived a meaningless life.
All in all, the importance of helping the people who do
not know, which today is regarded as more than the past cannot be overestimated
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* 문법
- 사소한 실수를 조심해주세요! 질문에 나온 문법은 절대 틀려서는 안됩니다 :)
* 내용 + 기법
- 타인을 돕는 것도 질문의 한 포인트이지만, 과거와 현재를 비교하라는 것도 질문의 포인트라 할수 있습니다.
고득점을 위해서는 맥락을 잘 파악하셔서 정교한 글쓰기를 해주셔야합니다!
과거에 비해서 현재 사람들이 타인을 도우려면 (신뢰가 많이 생겼다거나, 기부할수 있는 단체가 생겼다거나 하는 것들의 구체적인 예시를 제시해주셔야합니다!)
고생하셨습니다^ㅇ^
총점 22/30