■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : 해커스 라이팅 Test 3에 있는 Anasazi 사람들이 13세기 끝자락에 그들의 고향을 잠시 떠났었는데 그 이유는 극심한 가뭄때문이었을 것이다 라는 주제입니다. |
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▶ Your Answer :
Lecturer argues that hypothesis saying that
Anasazi residents abandoned their homeland because of a severe drought has
serious issues. This contradicts the reading passage’s claim that severe
drought was the reason why Anasazi left their hometown.
First, the lecturer argues that bones
showing sign of malnutrition do not mean anything. The reason is that,
malnutrition was very common in Anasazi. About 45% of children in Anasazi were
in nutrient deficiency even when bountiful crops were harvested. This casts
doubt on the reading passage’s claim that bones that show malnutrition are the
evidence of evacuation because of drought.
Second, the lecturer questions that why they
did not return after drought if they planned to occupy later when drought is
over. He states that they should have returned to their homeland if they were planning
evacuation just for drought. This counters the reading passage’s claim that condition
of the abandoned settlements is the evidence of evacuation.
Third, the lecturer mentions that resettling
in areas where water supply was abundant is not true. He says that Anasazi
people actually settled down on areas where there were not enough water
resources. For example, one of the areas they settled down is elevated land.
Its environment was even harsher than the homeland. This refutes the reading
passage’s claim that moving to places where water was plentiful is the evidence
of moving because of drought. |
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. reading and listening의 비율이 너무 listening쪽으로만 치우쳐져 있습니다.
비율은 5:5, 적어도 6:4 정도는 되어야 합니다.
이는 리딩에 대한 디테일 부족으로 이어지며, 분량 부족, 추가 설명 실패 등으로 이어질 수 있으니
리딩에서도 evidence를 많이 찾아서 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다.
3. introduction의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
4. 문법적으로는 군더더기 없이 깔끔한 에세이라고 볼 수 있습니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*