It is debatable that whether television has destroyed communication among friends and family members or not. I totally disagree with this statement because of several reasons based on several reasons: Watching television could give us more topics to talk about between friends or among family members. Also, even though we people watch television, it does not mean that television destroys communication among friends and family them.
Firstly First of all, there are many interesting programs and it they gives give us people to have more various topics to talk about (주제문장: 항상 문두에 배치). Most people enjoy watching television since it provides us people with interesting topics from dramas, movies, and or show programs. Like To illustrate, teenagers use to often have conversations about their daily life and watching television is in one part of the life stories. They watch whatever whichever programs they like to, and then it the stories in the programs becomes become issue in their conversations with their friends. For example, When I was in high school, I used to watch television at least one or two hours a day. Then, next day the following day, me I and all my friends used to talk about a the show television programs (뒷받침문장들)and so on. As we can see, Judging on my personal experience, television rather provides good sources of communication among friends (이 문장을 삽입한 이유: 뒷받침문장에서 주제문장으로 자연스럽게 연결하는 연결문장이 필요). If we people do not watch television, it is kind of hard to follow the conversation between among friends and family members. This is trully what happens nowadays. (이 문장은 자칫 텔레비전이 커뮤니케이션을 돕는 소스를 많이 제공한다는 측면을 부각시키는 것보다 사람들이 텔레비전이 없으면 커뮤니케이션에 끼어 들 수 없다는 부정적 뉘앙스를 제공합니다.) Therefore, watching television never destroys communication among friends. (주제문장을 다시 한번 강조하면서 BODY1 마무리)
Secondly In addition, watching television enhances family communication. The variety of television programs actually helps family members initiate conversation, which eventually provides a good chance to understand one another. (이 문장을 삽입한이유: 님의 body 2 에는 명확한 Thesis Statement 이 없습니다. 항상 paragraph 을 시작할 때 Thesis Statement 로 시작하는 것을 잊지 마세요.) Nowadays, it is true that many families hardly have a chat nowadays since parents are busy with their work and children are busy too with their study as well. I am pretty sure that the only possible the time family can seat together and have a conversation would be when we they watch television or have dinner together. Watching television together and having dinner does not mean that we just seat and quietly watching and eating. (군더더기문장 삭제) Even in these family gathering times, family members likely find themselves searching for the words to start conversing with. In such a moment, television provides them with a good topic to discuss. We discuss about the topic of a show or drama, movie. Like, how is the story going on or about the thing that a show program tries to tell us. For instance, my family used to have dinner together and while watching television. We started talking about an issue on the television program we are watching and, discuss about the television program that we watch. It makes us it used to lead us to discuss our own issues by connecting the issue on the TV programs into our current daily lives. argue each other in a good way, so we In fact, television enables family members to learn something and understand each other better than before. since some family members have different thoughts. (Support 를 조금 바꿔봤는데요. 이유는 텔레비전이 family communication 을 시작하는데 도움을 준다라는걸 서포트 하는 것으로 할려다보니. 암튼 마무리는 항상Thesis statement 의 강조입니다.)
To sum up, watching television does not destroy communication between friends and family. On the contrary, it rather makes us can have more communication by giving people various topics to talk about and providing a chance to start conversation. Well, Maybe if we watch television too much, here, too much means like watching television whole day, then maybe it would destroy our communication between friends and family. However, who is going to watch television like that since everybody has something to do everyday.
Conclusion 은 summary 와 thesis statement 의 강조입니다.