Group study가 좋은가, 좋지 않은가?^^ |
The lecturers describes the drawbacks of group study. As the group study makes morale of the students down and makes them waste time. In addition, it isn't reciprocal for them. However, it rebuts the reading passage's claim that the group study has definite advantages for everyone involved. 강의의 내용이 이러하다.그러나(?) 이것은 리딩의 포인트를 반박한다 however를 왜넣으셨는지..
First of all, group study discourages students. Some students don't do their assignments and even don't come to gather on time. As a part of the students do not participate in the group study constantly, morale of everyone falls. It even decreases the volition of faithful students. On the other hand, this contradicts the reading passage's claim that being with others gives them inspiration and encouragement to study. 문장구조가 전체적으로 짧습니다.. don't come to gather on time(X) do not arrive(come) on schedule. it even discourages ardent students.. volition of faithful students는 어색한 표현같네요 마지막에 on the other hand빼주세요
Secondly, group study time is misused frequently. For instance, students who are smarter than others waste their time because they have to repeat easy concepts of subjects. Besides, many students chat and don't do the task. Group study time turns into the sociable time. This fact refutes the reading passage's explanation that studying together saves time searching for information and members split the burden of doing research.
repeat easy concepts of subjects -> relearn what they have learned the sociable time -> a sociable time 마지막->saves time by searching information and spliting the burden of the research together Finally, group study is not reciprocal anymore. There are always student who freeload on the group. They don't do group activities hard and don't benefit other people. However they want to get good materials or information from others. This is directly opposes to the reading passage's assertion that all members in group can get benefits by supporting each other. anymore 빼주세요 student에 s붙이시고 , freeload라는 표현은 여기서 어색하네요
그래마오류랑 어색한 단어사용이 꽤 있는거 같네요.. 전체적인 구조는 잡히셨는데 문장구조가 너무 심플한거같습니다.. =============================================== 첨삭 부탁드립니다. reading passage 와 listening script가 없어서 죄송해요ㅠ 글 전체적으로 한번만 훑어봐주세요~ |