A teacher has a great impact on students and just words(run on인듯...) from a teacher can change the whole life of students.
기냥 앞부분만 살려보심이... 같은말이니까 그리고 뒷부분은 문법오류가 좀 있어요,
But,but 은 접속사 등위 접속산가요 헷갈리지만.. 두개의 비교되는 문장을 가지고 있을때 쓰죠. 토플에서 봐줄지 안바줄지 모르겠디만 문장을 시작할때 HOWEVER같은거 써주세요. P(-->p)eople have different ideas about which factor is the most important one of a teacher. Some people say that the ability to transfer knowledge well is important. However, I agree with the statement that getting along with students well is more important than knowing how to share knowledge because this(former) can raise the effectiveness of study and develop social skills.음,,,, of 다음엔 동명사가 오죠! 그리고 이표현자체가 좀 이상한거 같아요.
----> former encourages students to study and @)*)(%*소시얼 스킬 어떤의민지....
To begin with, a good teacher would be able to increase the effectiveness of study. This is because(-->because) people don't(-->do not) want to break relationships with people who(--->whom) they like. It is the role of a teacher(-->it is a teacher's role to make sure that근데 이문장 약간 쌩뚱맞은듯...) students get high grades. When relationships with a teacher is important to students, they will study hard because it is not(???) their desire to make their teacher disappointed.(well...--->when the relationship with a teacher gets important to students, they study hard not to dissapoint the teacher. For example, a friend of mine-she was a girl(이거 왜쓰신건지...)- respected a(-->her) math teacher since he was very friendly to her, and tried to mingle(밍글 여기서 쓸단어 아닌데..) with her well. Before he was coming(there is no need for present progress tense,--->came) to that school, she didn't(did not) have any interest on(-->in) math. It was too much difficult and made her confused. However, she didn't want to make him disappointed so studied math really hard. If he were just a normal teacher, she would not get(--->would have not gotten) an interest on(in) math. ---
---->If he was not so special to her, she would @()$*!_)(@#_%@_!.
Moreover, students can learn how to cooperate with others. A teacher is a role model to students. When a teacher interacts with students, they learn the way how to treat other people from a teacher. For instance, there was a history teacher when I was in a middle school. He always had a focus(-->focused) on people. He said that improving knowledge certainly plays a significant role in life but more important thing to have a successful life is being a true(진실된 인간truthful human/진짜 인간 true human being) human. This implies(-->means) that knowledge itself is useless if a person doesn't know how to make beneficial human relationships each other because he/she will be isolated from the society. I was greatly impressed by his words. And I still remember his words in my heart. Before he became my teacher, I ignored the social skills but I changed my mind after all because of him.
In short, I strongly believe that a teacher's social ability is more important than a know-how to share knowledge because this can improve the effectiveness of study and make students learn how to make nice interpersonal relationships.
잘쓰셨어요!)
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