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A substantial number of teenagers want to work while they are still students due to a necessity of extra money/lack of money needed extra money. However, parents worry about their grade of school. On the other hand, teenagers need to experience for preparing social life. Thus, I strongly support to have jobs while jops thile they are still students. There are few reasons. (-> Thus I strongly insist that teenagers should have jobs during their school days with following reasons)
First, students can get extra money to buy things for satisfying their needs getting extra money to students. In this rapidly changing world, people want to get new products such as cell phones, games, clothes and computers. They are shown by many advertisements advertiesments around us. Therefore, students need extra money to buy them. One of best examples is Apple iPhone Iphone by Apple. Iphone It is currently common cell phone in the world. It causes is a trend trand. Therefore, most students want to get Iphone it because of its popularity it is trand. If someone do not have it, they feel themselves as like stranger themselves. Thus, they need extra money to buy it.
In addition, students can accumulate good experiences. Students learn how to prepare their future life through the job unlike the school where they can learn only relationship and knowledge. However, in the school, they can learn just relationships and knowledges. 1. They need to learn about constitution of society. If they work while they are still students, it brings opportunities for their future. Eventually, they will work well in their future fields on their fields because of having experiences.
1. Constitution of society 라는 것이 정확하게 무엇을 말하는 것인지 모르겠습니다. 사회가 어떻게 돌아가는 지 알 필요가 있다. They need to know the way how society works.
In conclusion, I strongly support that the idea that students should have jobs while they are still students. They need to get extra money and learn through experiences for future. 2. However, students must know that school is one of the best and most important institute thing while they are still students.
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