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There is an argument over whether or not the current environmental situation will not improve in the future. Many people believe that environmental situation is too serious to make it better. My point of view, however, is that efforts of improving the polluted nature can be effected give positive effect on to the world. 은 명사이기 때문에, 동사처럼 사용 하실 수 없습니다. 만약 영향을 끼치다 라고 표현 하고 싶으시다면 affect을 사용해주세요 ^^> First, environment should be constantly cared for no more pollution. Second, caring about the environment has an effect on it.
Most of all, if people do not make effort to become a rescuer of the environment, it will eventually becomes really unable to save unsavable. Let me show an example to prove why people should care it environment without a pause. These days, on the average global temperatures are warmest ever. It is true that global warming has a negative effect on mankind throughout the world. A lot of garbage and consumed chemical resources by people becomes have became this atmosphere. and it causes that caused floods and landslides that took lives of countless people as well as putting affected areas at health risk. European nations were no exception. Many other nations also suffered frequent flood and wildfires. Unfortunately, it cost an astronomical amount of money to restore damaged buildings and other constructions back to normal. Under this circumstance, people may be unable to deal with pollution of environment any more. In For this reason, continuing to caring care about the nature natural environment is necessary for people to keep from becoming untouchable thing. <한 문장에 동사가 여러 번 나올 때에는 대부분 전치사가 그 두 동사 사이의 다리 역할을 합니다. 기억해주시고요. 또한 nature은 명사이기 때문에 형용사 역할을 할 수가 없습니다. 그렇기 때문에 nature의 형용사 격인 natural를 써주시면 됩니다>
Furthermore, activities for saving environment are not only positive, but also have effects on it. A report conducted by a journalist at New York Times proves that it is able to become. <무엇인 된다는 건가요? 문장이 완벽하지 않은 것 같네요. 목적어를 넣어주세요> There was a village that has had a extremely polluted environment including earth, air, woods and outside of constructions. <굳이 넣지 않아도 되는 표현은 과감하게 빼주세요. 간단하지만 아이디어가 정확하게 전달 될 수 있도록 ^^> Polluted atmosphere that was manly mainly because of CO2 of from cars and coal-burning plants made children’s noses to sneezing sneeze constantly. <코로 재채기 하죠? 다 아는 사실이기 때문에 코로 재채기 한다 라고 표현 하실 필요는 없습니다> Besides, it was nature that every soil was put at healthy risk polluted state without people’s considering dumping because people had no consideration when they dumped the trash. Additionally, woods trees could not only grow on unhealthy soil, but also amd it cannot prevent village from natural disaster such as flood or landslides. In constant fear of upcoming disasters, everybody in both in the public and private sectors were joining joined hands to go green. A growing number of people now use buses and subways on their way to work and home as well as and they even separated their trash. Surprisingly, the village’s entire environment becomes became clean and healthy to be able to keep people from disasters, and it was able to keep people from natural disaster.
In conclusion, I disagree that it is of no use for the people to care about current environment to be cared by many people. First, no more pollution is made by continuing caring care. Second, caring activities have definitely positive effects on the entire environment.
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