In general people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develope your essay.
In the past, our ancestors are called god's bless if he or she live more than 55. Now, most of people live longer than that, and they are called they are in his or her middle life. The rationale behind this is that the advance of the science techonologies related to medicine. In addition, the decrease of false belif and the increase sanitary also contirbute this phenomenan.
To begin with, medical techonology's development improves people's expected life span tremendously. Diverse progression of techonologies such as detecting the diseases and curing those help people to live longer. My grandfather's experince is one of the best examples that demonstrate this point. He had been came up with brain cancer until he was 50. However, he even didn't know he had a cancer, but the advancement of medical technology helps find the cancer and cure. So, he was able to find it by using MRI, and cure it by constant nursing and proper treatment. This clearly shows the progression of medical technologies increase people's expected life span.
On top of that, the dicrease of the misconception also contributes people to live longer. In other words, the growth of people' s counsciousness help people live longer because it prevents using actually bad treatment. Past generation poeple tend to exploit animal's fur or certain organ believing it is good for their health. People, yet, are suffer from bug or parasite in those organs. For instance, my friend's father was fascinated the supersticious medical treatment. He even eat the shell of eggs. However, he knew that it actually doesn't fuction anything from various TV programs about health. It plainly highlights that people's conciousness development positively effects people's life span.
Finally, reinforcement of sanitary amazingly increase life expectancy. It seems quite trivial, but it helps excessively. For example, the development of water system keep people clean. The cleanness increases resist aganist virus or bacteria, so poeple are able to live longer. Likewise, people can reap numerous benefits from wash cleanly.
On the whole, I strongly belive that the increase of life expectancy is because the medical techonology progressed and people's consciousness increased. Moreover, sanitary also takes a part of increasing people's health. As people live longer, they should know the quality of their life is important than the quantity of they live.
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