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People should carefully plan activities for their free time. Do you agree or disagree?
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Everyone wants to have a free time for relaxation in the middle of his/her
tightly-scheduled life. However, although the desire might be the same for all, only some people
end up being satisfied with what they did when they actually encounter leisure time. It is mainly the matter
of how whether one carefully plans activities for their free time. Even though there are some people
who prefer spending the time spontaneously without much plans, I strongly believe that it is much
better to give a deep thought about their free time for the following two reasons: time efficiency and
sake of stability of after-free time.
To begin with, people can have more time-efficient leisure. To be specific, when people think about
what activities they are going to do and how they are going to carry out beforehand, they will be
no-lost time considering these when they actually have the full time to enjoy themselves. It is because
it is not rare to see some people wasting their precious time because they did not know what they should
do. For instance, my brother, who always take the most ouf of his trips throught thorough planning, once
went to Jeju Islans in South Korea with his girlfriend when he got three days off from his work.
Because three days was very limited time for him to take a full course in the island, they decided to
follow the time schedule my brother has made the week before the actual travel. Because he has
researched from famous restaurants there, how long it takes to get there, how much money meals would
cost, what hotels they would stay, to where are the best places for snap-shots, they used their time
very efficiently. This plan made them feel happy since they could enjoy every aspect of the island.
As shown above, planning helps one to save whole lot of time.
Furthermore, people can continue their ordinary life styles after they had free time activities.
In other words, in order to make sure that the short leisure time do not affect people's long-term
everyday life negatively, one has to be prudent and discreet when planning for free time activities.
For instance, according to a research done by Korea Herald with head directors of Sonny company,
a Japanese firm, there is a significant difference between employees who spent their work-off
dyas after careful consideration and those who did spontaneously when they came back from an off week
for Christmas. While the former did not show much difference compared to how they were before the
break, the latter tended to drowse often, lose energy more easily, and did not show enthusiasm for work
they had before. Thus, this significantly affected their after-break work habits. This clearly shows that
carefully chosen activities can also help individuals maintain stable lifestyles after the free time.
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