Universities spend considerable amount of money in order to develop and improve school systems. Some students may regard sports and social activities as important as academics, for they provide an opportunitiy in terms of managing health and providing experiences. Contrary to their opinion, I certainly believe that universities should continue to spend more money into improving academic systems; students can receive high quality education and the image of the school can be improved.
다음부터는 문제도 올려주세요 :)
읽어보니 대학이 어떤 시스템에 돈을 더 많이 써야한다고 생각하느냐가 문제 같은데,
사회활동과 스포츠가 중요하다고 생각하는 생각하는 학생들이 있다. 에서 끝나기보다는
이러이러하므로 대학교가 그분야에 돈을 더 많이 투자해야 한다고 생각하는 학생들이 있다. 이런식으로 나가시는게 좋을 듯 싶습니다 :)
To begin with, students will be able to study more effectively. If universities make
alarge expenditures on enhancing educational system and infrastructure, students will be able to learn in-depthknowledgesknowledge and enjoy favorable class conditions. These can be achieved through numerous ways such as hiring renowned professors and buying high-tech equipments. To be specific, in 2009, my university suffered from tight budget and spent almost the same amount of money into sportsandas into academics. In 2010, however, the national government gave the school a grant and at the same time, a new university president came. As soon as the new president assumed the position, he altered the school's budget to fund more into education. Thanks to his support, not only students could be taught from many talented professors, but also benefited from using newly designed labs. Surprisingly, the average grade of school went up by 15% and also, our university became more competitive. In this respect, financial assistance on academics can bring about a positive effect on students in terms of learning.
Secondly, the school can receive good remarks from the public. With strong education system and favorable learning enviroment, students can sharpen their competitive edge by specializing in their field more thorougly. The public and parents will see this phenomenon from positive point of view and thus, universities can enhance their
school'sown image.For example, it is true that universities which have powerful sports teams can win the public attention in sports matches.Making victories in sports competition can be important. But that doesn't improve the image of the school as much as winning an academic event.However,Universities should serve its main purpose which is to teach knowledges and help students to prepare for their future. In real life, many prestigious universities like Harvard, Yale and Princeton are famous not mainly due to their strong sports teams but because of their exceptionally great education. In this respect, through intense investment in academics, universities can increase their competitiveness and image.
반대측의 주장을 띄워주는 문장보다는 자신의 주장을 좀더 명확히 하는 문장을 넣는 것이 좋겠죠 :)
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