Thanks to highly developed technology, it has been almost possible for a person to live without other's help. However, this world is too big to live alone. As old cliche says, it is obvious two is always better than one. In my opinion, cooperation is very advantageous for its ability to lessen the time and the burdon of effort and increase which increases the quality of work.
To begin with, cooperation helps to get a result in a relatively short time with less arduous work. To be more specific, one can achieve the goal more effectively and fast by working together. For instance, while I was studying TOEFL, I received a very conducive information from the web site on the internet. I was be able to get an effective study guide which helped me to study alone. In that web site, people are helping each other, but if they do not share their own strategy, no one is willing to
help him or her. In that web site, people help each other sharing and discussing various strategies of studying TOEFL. Moreover, cooperation is more necessary especially these days because of enormous amount of information available. I cannot distinguish whether or not the information I find is reliable by myself. With ...?
한사람이 자기 전략을 공유하지 않으면 다른사람들이 도와주지 않는다는 내용은 주제의견과 상관이 없어 보여요 :)
On top of that, another advantage of cooperation is that it betters performance. No one is perfect in any specific area and likely to make even minor mistakes. By gathering effort, however, people would be able to result produce results that are almost impeccable in work. Not only that, but also they could improve the quality of their work by sharing thoughts. An active discussion might help come up with a creative idea contributing to more sophisticated result. From my experience, I thought my eassay was essays were perfect, but after asking my friends for revision, I figured out I had a terrible fixed idea about the main point. Polished by a neutral opinion, my essay became much more contructive and logical. To sum up, I think the ability to work together is vey conducive in these days because it curtails the time and effort and improves the quality of performance. Harmonious work could end up with a marvellous work: Helen Keller would never be a historical woman if there was not help form the dedicated teacher.
전체적으로 잘 하셨으나 글이 주제에서 많이 빗나갔습니다.
과거와 현재를 비교하면서 과거보다는 현재 더 cooperation이 많이 필요하느냐? 가문제인데
그냥 일반적인 협력의 장점들만 나열하셨어요 :)
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