정보나 뉴스가 믿을만한가
With the advent of computer and cell phone which allow us to find and upload information easily without any constraints, there are so many unreliable and exaggerated information and articles. Although not all information found on online and mass media are not are having a filthy purpose or inaccurate facts, more or less, it is now too difficult to depend on the articles and information obtained from news and anonymous resources. To illustrate this point, many celebrities are damaged by a lot of rumors. 이 점을 좀더 설명하기 위해서 많은 연예인들이 여러 루머에 의해 손해를 입었다.. 뭔가 부족하지 않나요 :) Also, many media companies have their own interests.
It is inevitable to see the articles in newspaper that muckrake the private life of celebrities leading the celebrities to be encroached on their privacy regardless of the truth. However, in most cases, these articles are just suspicious facts because people tend to like to talk about someone who is famous. In this sense it is natural for these rumors to be generated. For instance, a few years ago a female singer was included to included in 아니면 caught up in the bad news which is was related to political issues. The article said the singer had the an inappropriate relationship with politician. In the end she had to quit her job and hided hide to avoid the sight of people. Unfortunately after few years this incidence proved to be false. She was a sacrifice of an unreliable news.
On top of that, news and articles are not trustworthy because they have their own interests. Not only being influenced by their stake holders, but also do they depict the fact in a way favorable to their own interests. not only~ but also 를 쓰실때는 앞뒤시제를 통일하셔야 합니다. 또한 Not only being influenced by their stake holders 에는 주어가 빠져있습니다 :) They exaggerate facts in order to attract the subscribers and gain more rate of subscription. For example as many studies have shown that all of news companies are related to big conglomerates. A huge media company was accused of being partial to some companies before. They beguiled their readers into buying their own company’s stocks by means of fake articles so as to make money. But this had been proved to be fraud and they = ? (the company owners) were detained in prison.
All in all, the information is inaccurate and unreliable in many cases. Because people enjoy making false story about famous people and most news companies are interested in making profit by means of news which must contain only the truth.
전체적으로 문장구조가 정말 좋습니다. 글도 잘 읽히구요 :)