Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to do work by machine than by hand. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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As our modern technology is developing, there is(=>are) many machines appeared to be used in working instead of using humans' hand. Its effects has(=>have) brought many benefits and convenient(=> convenience) to our lives. This is due to the fact that our time is actually being saved as we use the machine in our daily lives. Also we become to do work more creatively and clearly after appearance of machine. Therefore I firmly believe that It is better to do work by machine than by hand.
First of all, we has become to save the time according to(=> thanks to) machine's fast working ability in short of time.(=> in a short time) We can finish work at least minutes but in contrast, it would take much time if we do work by using our hand. For example, we often use copymachine to copy many papers. We don't copy every papers (=>paper) using our hand because It wastes too much time and energy. Imagine that you're writing the document using pen one by one. However, using machine is already necessary to live our lives effectively. (=> It is already necessary to use machine for living our lives effectively.)(necessary는 가주어 it을 써서 거의 씁니다.)
(=>=> Therefore, no one would deny that machine has become intergral part of our lives in terms of effectiveness.)
More over (=> Moreover), we also can work more creatively and clearly when we use the machine.(=> when using machine.) Usually, human makes many mistakes because they are merely human who is thinking or imagining something in every moment, leading to making many errors. but machines, which is(=>are) developed as automatic system, don't make any mistakes and posssbility of missing work. For instance, teachers who work in school usually gives(=>give) students essay assignment and they want essay in computer typying (=> asking them to type it using computer)(S V1 and V2 로 나올 때는 S V1, V2~ing 형태로 분사구문을 사용하여 축약하는 것이 더 깔끔합니다.) because its clear arrangement is more easier for teachers to read for teachers. (의미상의 주어는 to 부정사 앞에 씁니다.)(=>=> its clear arrangement makes it easier for teachers to read )
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