Some people believe that school should teach students at least 11 months per year. (paraphrase!) However, I disagree with that statement for fallowing following reasons. First, taking class for 11 months will decrease learning efficiency of students. Second, students do not get to have experiences out of school.
To begin with, students cannot concentrate on their classes for 11 months. To be specific, if school teaches their students for 11 months continually, students will have heavy assignments. (11 months of school could mean lighter assignments, so be careful on logical reasonings, or perhaps you could elaborate more on it to explain. ) Therefore, students could not have sufficient rest time. In this context, student’s learning efficiency will decrease naturally. In this regard, I think the plan that students should be required to take classes at least for 11months per year is not a good idea.
Second, students should have various experiences apart from school. Specifically, as having multiple experiences, students could be more active and creative person. School works would not be satisfied to their all their student’s demand. For example, sometimes students can learn more from soccer camping such as a way of cooperation cooperating together. Therefore, I think that school works and out of school experience have to be compared.
To sum up with, school should not teach their students for 11 months per year. This is because students need enough rest time. Also, they need to have various experiences off school. It is not too much to say that school doe not need to offer classes to students for 11 months per year.
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명료하긴 하지만 수준이 있는 글이라고 보기는 어렵습니다 :)
한가지 지적하자면 body1,2가 너무 간단합니다.
body 1,2 both need much more details and explanations.
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