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Recently, the number of families raising pets at home has increased dramatically. Considering the size of families has been decreasing rapidly, the role and position of pets in a family have become most important than ever in the history. There are still many arguments about the pros and cons of raising pets in small family, but I believe that a relationship with animals has good effect on family of modern society in both emotional and educational aspects.
To begin with the emotional benefit, the family has become lack of emotions as the size of the family has shrunk in modern society. In the middle of swiftly changing industrialized society, family members have no time to talk each other, to build relationship and even to eat together. What makes the situation worse is the television; it has got rid of tiny opportunity allowed to talk among family members. To mitigate such defections of modern and small family and deserted relationship among family members, pet can be a pleasure and motivation to rebuild the broken relationship and emotional function of family.
Another equally important aspect is of education, especially educational function to build social ability of children. There have been several studies on the differences in behavioral development of children between who are raised in a family with pets and who without pets. The results were not much different from the expectation of experts. The children raised in the family with pets showed apparently faster development of social ability than those who were not. Moreover, the gap between two groups enlarged when the size of family was small. The result shows how important the role of pet in small families in industrialized modern society and propose remedy to solve social problems of adults society originated from lack of social development in childhood.
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