제품에 불만이 있을때, 현장에서 바로 항의하는 게 좋을까요? 아님 편지로 항의하는게 좋을까요? |
On any given day, it is inevitable(overly fancy..i mean it's looking good.. but oh well let's say it's your style) to see the long lineof people complaining about poor service or faulty products in front of customer service desks. ---->my suggestion/ We easily see many people standing in a long line with grumpy faces at the customer sevice desk of a store. (well mine is bad too haha sorry)
As for me, I(repetitive) would complain in writing rather than join the people in line. The rationale behind this is that complaining in writing allows people to deliver their displeasure in a logical and composed way and save time significantly. First of all, complaining in writing plays an integral role in enabling people to deliver their displeasure in a composed and logical way by providing them with enough time to bring their anger under control and collect their emotions. During the time given, we can recollect all situations and write a complaining letter with best-suited words to explain logically not emotionally that we deserve reimbursement. To take a personal example, I had a Chinese cuisine catered for a banquet on my father’s 60th birthday anniversary. The problem is that he arrived an hour late and all food he brought came to be cold and was arranged messily. Even though I got angry and wanted to express my anger at the spot, I cannot help but to calm down because my parents and cousins were sitting near me. After celebration I took time to write a complaining letter because I came up with the idea that I deserve reasonable reimbursement. As taking time to write, I was able to choose the best words to express logically my embarrassing situation due to the cuisine’s poor service rather than to appeal emotionally. I recognized that if I showed my anger in person at the spot I made the cuisine angered and made worse the situation rather than resolved it.(토플롸이팅은 일기쓰는 곳이아닙니다.Be concise and correct! 저정도의 예시는 세문장으로 줄일수있겠네요)In this sense, in that people are able to take time to collect all situations, complaining in writing is much more effective. On top of that, complaining in writing is the most convenient (in terms of what??) and time-saving way. Nowadays, most companies have their homepage(복수 명사가 되어야 합니다! 그리고 web sites 라고 하는게 더 미국적인 방식이랄까) and are willing to collect customers’ opinions. If we use the homepage to deliver our displeasure(weak noun), we are able to save our valuable time in that we do not need to go to the stores again and stand in line in front of customer complaining desks. Moreover, because we can submit our letter online by simply clicking one time a mouse, it is very convenient(wrong usage of BECAUSE). For example, I bought one body lotion from a TV home shopping channel. The delivered product (delivered is not an necessary)was only half full. I logged in to its homepage and I submitted my complaining letter(letter of complaint). Amazingly, the whole process took only three minutes to get the refund. In sum, complaining in writing is a much better way than in person because it gives the opportunity to collect all emotions and bring anger under control. Moreover, it save our valuable time and is convenient.
완벽하게 첨삭하지 않았습니다. 좋은 표현과 어려운 단어를 많이쓰지만 효과적으로 글쓰는법을 모르시는것같네요 공부 정말 열심히 하신것 같은데 학원을 다니신다면 강사님의 말씀을 조금 귀기울여 들어주세요. 아니면 책을 좀더 따라가시는데 좋을 듯....... creativity cannot be used nor noticed if your essay is over all poor. 미술배울때 피카소든 누구든 자기만의 방식이 있는 화가들도 기본부터 배움니다 기본에 충실하시길.
1.복수 형용사는 복수 명사를 취합니다. my life their lives
2.a 와 the 의 사용 유의!!!! 3. 문장 이 길게 길게 and 와 comma로 연결시켜놓으셨는데 그냥 큰맘먹고 잘라내는 연습도 하심이.....
sorry i kinda chopped off you essay but i did it for you! thanks.
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