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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic :Teenagers have jobs while they are still students ... | |
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There is no doubt that job experience could help teenagers` social life. It is also true that students have to concentrate on their study. In my opinion, students have to focus on their school life rather than early job experience, because students need to get knowledge for their future work during school days, and student life is also very valuable thing on its own.
First of all, (I think 쓸필요 없음) students have to focus on their school life, because the period that people are students is the one for accumulating the knowledge for of future career. In my case, I was that guy who concentrated on working rather than studying. The beginning was good, because I could earn money by my self, and spend it without parents' permission. However as time pass by, my friends started get way (무얼 의미하는 건지)better job than mine, I was fixed in my terrible job which I felt proud at once. 이해가 되지 않음It`s because I didn`t get ready for my future career by studying.
Second of all, student life is very valuable period in whole person's life. thing in the whole period of person`s life can be another reason why I don`t agree topic above. If the time of student pass by once, it never come again, so (쓸필요 없음)students have to enjoy their students life when they are. When I was young, I din`t didn't focus on the school life as I mentioned above, I have few memories drag me into like nostalgia of my young days. Additionally I don`t have friends who I keep in touch with. These are all because of my mistakes that I ignored the value of period of school life, and concentrated on other things like working.
All in all, the time of being students the school life is very the important period of our life, so I think we need to focus on doing something what we have to do in the time. I thus think disagree with the idea that teenagers have jobs while they are students.
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