Many people tend to avoid being a leader in a group since a leader usually has to do more works and has to be more responsible of the result. Admittedly, leaders get more stress and sometimes should sacrifice themselves. However, in my point of view, being a leader is a valuable experience because a leader can feel a great sense of accomplishment and develop a lot of important social skills.
First of all, a leader contributes more than other members, so he or she deserves to be more proud of the result. Of cause course, every member has his or her own role and works for the team, but, undoubtedly, a leader does much more important tasks: distributing duties, checking the process, organizing every detail and so on. To demonstrate, when I was a college student, I had a role of a director in a school festival. 리더가 더 많은 일을 한다. 이를 논증하기위해, -> 이런식으로 가면 독자는 리더가 더 많은 일을 함을 논증하기 기대하겠죠? 그런데 막상 예시의 중점은 더큰 보람과 성취감이므로 혼란스러울 수 있습니다. Thus 해서 정리해준다음에 To demonstrate 으로 가면 더 부드러울 수 있을 것 같습니다. This role required me to deal with so many things, that I felt seriously burdened. Even though it made me exhausted, I did not resign from it and worked hard to make a wonderful festival. Finally, the festival finished successfully. Many students said that they were satisfied with programs of the festival and thanked me a lot. Especially, members who worked with me to prepare the festival presented me a clock, as a gift of gratitude. I cannot forget the great happiness and fulfillment.
Moreover, a leader can have a valuable lesson, while leading other members. A leader has to not only control other members, but also listen to their ideas carefully. In addition, he or she sometimes has to reconcile or persuade them when a conflict occurred occurs. Hence, a leader can naturally learn many important social skills such as persuasion or initiative. According to the Chosun, the biggest newspaper company in Korea, most recruiters consider those social skills the most important criterion to choose evaluate jobseekers. They prefer applicants who has an experience as a leader experienced a leader, because they believe that those applicants can cope with challenging tasks much better that than others.
In conclusion, a role of a leader is worth to experience. Because a leader can feel a strong sense of accomplishment and develop important social skills. Therefore, I always recommend that a young man take the chance to be a leader.
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