Over the past 100 years, Industrial revolution made a great progress into the modern life, and finally people’s life drastically was improved in that era. Automobiles are considered a great example of what Industrial revolution brought about. So, I agree with the idea that having automobiles has a significant impact on our life.
First of all, without vehicles, things going in modern society 애매한표현 말고 좀더 구체적으로 :) won’t be able to be maintained successfully. The simple tasks, for instance, mail delivery, transportation, or business matters cannot be efficiently handled. In an early 19th century in U.S. people had largely depended on using wagons or pony express as a way of transferring goods or delivering mail, which takes almost a month or even longer than that. However, in these days, even delivery process from the overseas takes only 7 business days.
Secondly, human activity will be stuck in some limited areas without the advantages that automobiles give. This will finally slow the development of society, and human life will constantly be in inconvenience. For example, without vehicles, there is no proper way to get to a desired place in a short amount of time. It’s even worse when the place is far away from one’s living place. In a situation in which everything needed in human life has to take be taken in a long time, human knowledges or technologies, which will improve our life, cannot be shared widely and rapidly.
The best advantage of automobiles is that it shortens the amount time of a daily process needed in human life. It’s hard to imagine that we live in the world where automobiles don’t exist because there will be only few things we can do to improve our life without automobiles.
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