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Some people say that television and movies have a positive influence on young people’s behavior. However, I strongly believe that television and movies have a negative influence on young people’s behavior for two reasons. First, there are so many violent behavior on television and movies. Second, television and movies are so addictive.
To begin with, children can learn about violent action from television and movies. Some people claim that children’s violent behavior have nothing to do with watching television and movies. However, according to the Samsung research, children who watch television over 2ours in a day appear their violent behavior more than those who do not. Take my experience as an example, the village that I lived was a very peaceful place, one day, however, took place a case of murder in the village. The police caught murderer and investigated his everything. Surprisingly, He watched cruel television program every day. Therefore, as watching television and movies, children can more violent than those who do not.
Second, young people can be addicted to watching television and movies because they are so addictive. Several persons say that children can control their schedule from watching television because television is not addictive. However, I think that television can be very addicting. For example, my best friend Lee was the best student in my high school. He always earned top marks on every semester. Nevertheless, he started losing his grip on study when he began watching television and his grade downed rapidly. He nearly gave up his study at the end of the semester, and, eventually, he could not enter the university he wanted. If he did not be addicted to watching television, he could enter the university that he wanted.
In conclusion, I think that television and movies have a negative effect on children because there are so many violent scene on television and movies and they can be very addicting.