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Some people think that it is better to travel in a group with a tour guide because they don't have to worry about scheduling. However, I think that you can get many -> much more advantages by traveling individually. This is because you don't need to be concerned about enjoying whatever you want and not being able to meet with the group members on time. Also, you don't often get enough free time -> get enough free time in group tours.
First of all, you will be able to spend as much time as you want if you think something is worth seeing or enjoying. In group tours, your guide would give you a limited amount of time for sightseeing, not allowing enough time in order to actually feel the beauty and appreciate it. -> appreciation On the other hand, your own trip will not have restricted time schedules. Rather, you can be more flexible and spend more time on what YOU think it -> is more interesting, not what most people, including the tour guide, think is marvelous -> worthwhile. For instance, when I visited China with my family, we had about 30 minutes in each site, which let us just enough time to take pictures and say 'wow.' This trip didn't really inspire -> inspires me so greatly, even though I think that I might have been enjoyed it more if we could understand more about Chinese culture and had more time in each place.
Moreover, schedules of group tours are often overwhelming. Group tours often cover many different sites in a short period of time. In order to do many activities in a limited amount of time, it is not strange at all to wake up early in the morning, go to bed late, and not have enough meal time. When you are not healthy, you won't be able to enjoy the least part of your trip. Do you think you would love to pay and not be able to see and do what you deserve? Not really. (OFF TOPIC)Again, to give you an example of my experience, I had to wake up at 6 in the morning and go to bed at 11 at night even though I was only a fourth grader at the time when I went to China. It didn't really strike me so miserable when I noticed that I could sleep only seven hours a day, but I did feel very uncomfortable because I kept dozing off in the bus. Also, I was very tired because I was physically weak. This was another reason why my trip to China wasn't so wonderful, as many of you would think.
To conclude, you can't have enough time to evaluate the real beauty of the place when you have limited time in a group tour. Also, group tours usually have overwhelming schedules, which prevent you from enjoying the trip perfectly. Therefore, I think that it is very important to travel individually rather than to travel with a tour guide in a group.