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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology had made the world a better place to live. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. | |
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The world had been changed through many developments. Especially the development of Technology had made the world a better place to live. There are were so many inconvenience in our lives until Technology emerges emerged. Therefore, without technology, we will have difficulty living our daily lives.
First, Technology makes made it possible to do things possible that aren't weren't able to be done in the past. In the Ancient period, people just lived in thier territory and it's takes to took a long time for them to go to a distant place. However, Technology changed it more convenient solved this situation. For example, with the advent of the cars, people can go to distant places far away in shorter time. Moreover, even they people can travel other countryies which is that are on the opposite to of their territory through by plane. it is A unthinkable thing in Ancient era. In Additon, people can cure disease which is incurable illness in past. So quality of life also improved.
Secondly, as technology developes, modern people became much more intelligent than in past. Ancient people did just simple work and didn't have many chances of using to use thier brain. But Recently,with development of technology,people cannot help using their brain. And society became more competitive and wokrs became more complicated and sophisticated than past. Recent research shows that modern people are becoming more and more intelligent rapidly. For instance, I was not good at mathmathics at an early age, but i became good at it because watching The Internet lecture, I can understand many principles that I didn't know when I study alone.
In conclusion, Many advantages of technology makes our society a better place to live. If it hadn't been developed, Our quality of life haven't would not have been improved. Therefore, I firmly belive that technology had made the world better place to live. | |
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