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As time passed, people desire to gain more and more, especially learning. The society is getting more competitive, and people need to be paced, and prepared prepare with for that. People usually choose one of the ways to getting get advanced level of education. However, people need to think seriously about the necessities of that for all students. In my opinion, it should be restricted only to good students, because it raises efficiency by having environment of studying with only good students. Also, the budget will can be saved for other departments.
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To begin with, the only good students are eligible to take higher education, since the environment of studying can be formed. People usually prefer to study with people who are good at studying. The reason is when they study together then, they are motivated to study harder and they cannot be distracted by people who do not study. The environment of study is very critical, so it definitely affects to the result. For example, in private school, the students are gathered together who passed the entrance exam, so most of them study hard and enthusiastic. On contrary, the public school, since entrance exam is not required, any sort of students are gathered. This makes huge differences. In Canada, Biotech is opened for all students to participate annually. After project, students get awards. According to record, 70% of participants are from private school, and more than 60% of recipients for awards are also from private school. This evidently shows that the environment makes students to be more successful. Thus, higher level of education should be only offered to students who are willing to take it.
Moreover, finances are saved a lot, so deeper education should be restricted only to good students. When the country offers education to students, financial supports are entailed. The supports are all coming from the citizens’ taxes. Citizens work hard, and pay tax for students who are not interested in higher education. That is wasting money, and their labor. The taxes should be used in more valuable way. Also, the money used per student is quite considerable. For example, in Manitoba, Canada, the school divisions grant $200 per student annually, also, additional supports can be up to $500. Investing money $200 for students is not required, when the advanced level of education is limited for to only some good students. Just say, 250 students do not take it, then more than $50000 can be saved. Instead, they can be used more valuably for such as museums, charity clubs, or developing city conditions. Hence, government should consider carefully for giving education, because it is not necessary for some students with spending a lot of money. because since it requires a lot of money.
To conclude, education is important, and in order to raise the efficiency, the higher education should be only proffered to potential students. Environment of studying is critical to focus on studying and get motivated. It can be formed effectively when only with good students. Also, the citizens’ tax can be used more preciously than wasting money to support non potential students. Therefore, taking deeper level of education randomly should be randomly prevented by giving opportunities only to good students.
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