It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. |
These days, more and more parents would do anything for their children's better lives. They eager to provide their children all the best things. One of the things that they consider important is the environment where the children would grow up. And some people believe that it is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. I firmly agree with the statement for the following reasons: First, children can experience diverse things. Also, they can live in a non-polluted area. First, children go through various experience if they live in the countryside. Children learn not through books, but by their real experience. By feeding animals and seeing vegetables growing, they would recognize the preciousness of the nature. In contrary, even if a child in the city reads a book about natural environment, he/she cannot feel the value of nature by heart. Moreover, children living in the countryside can be more healthy. Since the countryside is not as much developed as the city, the environment is less polluted than that of a city's. For instance, I now live in Seoul, the capital city of my country, Korea. It has been 3 years since I moved to Seoul from Boeun, a countryside. When I lived in Boeun, I could see many stars in the sky at night. However, I can hardly see any stars in Seoul because of the air pollution. To sum up, I think it is far better for a child to live in a countryside for he/she can experience new things in direct way and he/she can be more healthy. These are the things that children living in a city can never get. Hope parents in a city would make a wise decision and move to a countryside for their children! |
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