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1. People attend school for many different reasons (for example, expanded knowledge, societal awareness, and enhanced interpersonal relationships). Why do you think people decide to go to school? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. these days, a lot of people want to go back to school because of the financial crisis and tight job market, since economic condition effects a lot on the job market. many people have been laid off since the economic depression. Some people think it is better to going back to school than getting a job or even keeping their job. many people are afraid of getting fired or being cut back their salaries. getting a degree does not necessarilly mean that they are going to get more fancy jobs or money. it's partially true but not always. though getting a degree might give them more options to choose prefarable jobs. apparently many people think it is worth to try even though expensive tuition and their time for studying Meanwhile some people would go back to school to expand their knowledge. personally i went to graduate school to learn more about business. even though i majored business back in college, i wouldn't say that i know much about business. people tend to learn for their entire lives, for example, i have read an article about an old lady who finally passed the driver's license test. it might sound a little bit trivia for some people,however, it is true that people have a tendency to learn new things constantly. i believe it is their one of those basic instinct. Besides, it could be related to getting a better job as well. usually it is true that more qualified candidates or applicants are subject to have better jobs than who aren't. in the society where im living in, people are so obsessed with getting more education and some certificate regarding their potential jobs. it is true that more people are getting educated than several decades ago. some people may wonder. is it a good thing? from my point of view, they should decide carefully before they go to school. of course they should consider big amount of money and time they are going to spend. in order to get the best result of it, they should aware of what they want to do in their future, and what they want to be. if someone wants to be a fireman, he may not need a MBA degree.
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