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Governments should pay attention to health care issues rather than environmental issues. Do you agree or disagree?
Many people are dying of this minute by disease without proper treatment and a lot of natural organisms are also dying by human activities. People always want to get better care from government and at the same time, the nature wants to protect their being. In the this situation, what is the which comes first? Some people might think that people are the master of Earth, so they ask more investment for the human health to the government. However, I disagree with this opinion because how to live with man and nature exist ?? and preserved environment is able to give people help which is cured from their illness. (cure for their illness 아닌지?밑줄친 부분 둘다 뜻을 분명히 모르겠어요 이런것 안나오게 조심하셔야 합니다 :)
The first reason is that both environmental issue and human health problem are important in position of the government. On the other hand, the government funding is limited, so they cannot support enough both them. so they cannot support both of them enoughly. By the way, not only can taking care of nature solve environmental issue, but also people can be satisfied. The best example is tourist industry. Modern people enjoy foreign travel to find places that have beautiful scenery and tourists usually spend a great amount of money in the countries they visit. Therefore, if the government invest money to solve natural issue and develop travel sites, finance income will increase and the administration can reinvest more money to care people' health.
In addition, the nature has great healing powers, so people can get helps from nature. But, human intervention has destroyed this function of the nature. For living, people cut down a number of trees, animals chased out of their habits habitats and people generate various hazardous wastes. Indeed, it gives negative influences on the nature and becoming arrows the target of the arrow (화살이 우리에게 같은 한국적 표현은 직역하지 않는게 좋습니다) has been returned to us. Thus, people's immune system is weakened and in fact, a lot of sick people are by the effects like asthma, atopy and super virus. For example, I have suffered from asthma when I lived in big city. My mom took me to see doctors to many hospitals. However there are no ones who were able to cure my illness. Consequently, my family moved to countryside that there are many trees, clear air, and fresh foods. After 3 years, I treated from my asthma because clean nature helped me to be cure from the disease -> the asthma was healed by itself because of the clean natural environment around me. As a result, the efforts of the government for conserving nature can help people to be healthier.