Nowadays, many students study hard to go to university or college. Actually, the tuition of university or college is very expensive. One example is that a smart student can’t go to university or college because he doesn’t have enough money to go there.-> An example would be a student who has a great potential, not being able to enter university due to insufficient economic condition. So there is one argument which says that college or university should be offered free of charge to all citizens of a country. But, I disagree with that argument because of financial problems of a society and the value of universities or colleges and level of students-> +gets degraded.
Above all, if that argument is achieved-> (argument can't technically be achieved), the country will suffer from-> suffer financial problems. As all people know that how much the tuition of university or college is, the country will definitely get through a hardship due to the money.-> University tuition fees are expensive, the country will definitely go through economic recession. <- 논리적으로 연결이 안되는것 같네요. And, all citizens of a country will have to pay much tax before than they paid.-> than they were paying before. Moreover, there is an example similar to it. In 2010, Vancouver held the Olympic game of winter-> winter olympics. That was fail. So, citizens of Vancouver are paying much tax. They are suffering of the tax.-> ??
-> 머릿속에 있는대로 얘기하는것이 아니라 논리를 이해가 쉽도록 잘 정리해서 전개해나가는 연습이 필요하시고, 또 뜻전달을 할 수 있는 정확한 문장을 구성하시는 연습을 하셔야 할것같습니다.
Second, if all citizens go to university, the value of university will be decline. I think that students who go to university want to get more knowledge and experience to achieve their goals. And, they have to study hard to go to university. On the other hand, if going to university is free, they will think that university is not important to them. So, they will not study hard.
Finally, university or college can’t be distinguished which universities is much better. There are national universities in each nation. The tuition of that schools is a little cheap than individual schools. For example, if one student who is poor wants to go to national university, he will try to study hard to get there. But if the tuition of university is free, he will not study hard.
Ultimately, it is not good that university or college should be offered free of charge to all citizens of a nation. In order to stimulate students, now system have to continue for a long time. |