▶ Your Answer :It is often said that spending more money in support of athletics is waste of money at worst and pleasant diversion at best. However, from my point of view, advocating the development of sports related field is very essential for couple of reason. It is directly related to quality of public health and plays a pivotal role in generating better image of a country internationally.
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To start with, investment in athletics has significant impact on the maintenance and improvement of public health. This is because the money will be used in the construction of a wide variety of sports facilities such as gym, swimming pool, and public parks which will then increase the accessibility of many ordinary people to them. Form my personal experience, when I was in seventeen I used to suffer from obesity because there were not many places to work out around my house. However, new twenty four hour opening public gym supported by the government came into introduced to our town. After that I was able to exercise in new gym without any inconvenience to go and find gym far from my place. As a result, I did not have to suffer from obesity any more.
Also, invest in athletics plays an essential role in making good image of a country internationally. Although there are many other ways to improve a country’s image, investment in the field of sports have greatest impact and is the most effective way. This is because sports have the highest accessibility for to public and most familiar to them. For example, I would like to talk about Brazil which has one of the strongest soccer team in the world. Even this country do not have such big effect on the world’s economy, there are no one who does not know about this country. It is obvious that the reputation of Brazil as one of the most well known country in the world is because of their soccer team.
In brief, investing in athletics has huge number of positive effects on various fields that are related to our lives. As I mentioned above, it helps publics to stay healthy and to improve the image of a country internationally which will absolutely bring in huge advantages to both government and public.
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