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An intriguing topic of discussion at hands is whether students are influenced more by their friends than by their teachers. The answer to this question can vary greatly depending on individual perspectives. Thus, the jury may still be out, but as far as I am concerned, I agree with the statement, in this essay, I will present two reasons supporting my standpoint as follows.
First of all, In Korea, the status of teachers goes significantly down in these days. This is because most teachers cannot follow the new generation thinking. Although strict manners are prevalent in education system, young students in their ten require themselves to acquire open and free mind, thinking from teachers. However, teachers do not admit the students’ view. According to a the recent reported by the National Reseach Center of Korea, students today have a distrust to their teachers who make students discouraged because of a low score in exam. Teachers always stress not about indiviodual perspectives but about academic performances. In this sense, it is evident that students are apt to have a negative standpoint about their teachers, it followed that it is hard to say students are influenced by their teachers considerably.
Also, most students are stay together with their friends more than their teachers. The underlying cause lies in the fact that teachers do not have the luxury plenty of the time to care all students they teach. Take my high school years as illustration. When I am a boy scouts members, as a team I participated in SCC(Science&Invention Competition). My friends, teahcer, Kap su Lee and I made a team named superb science, for winning, we strived for fabricating to fabricate creative invention. In the course of ready for the competition, not having enough time, teacher gave us a short advice that was not useful sincerely. Although it is hard to make a unique invention, we did our best, as a result, could win in the competition. Through the competiton, I could be able to widen my perspectives and social network. After that, whenever we have a time, by meeting regulary, we relieve our stress from a heavy lord of school works.
In conclusion, I strongly argue for my standpoint on account of the two reasons mentioned above. Once agatin, although the verdict may still be out, I personally believe that two of my rationales above are sufficiently convincing enough to represent the viewpoints of a majority of people who are in favor of my claim.
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