도입문장 꼭 써주세요. 바로 들어가주시는건 멋있는 에세이가 아닙니다. 예) The increase demand for higher education has skyrocketed in the recent years.
Upon this issue 하시고 이으시면 더 좋겠습니다. opinions are divided over whether students learn the most important things in life inside school. My view on this issue is that outside of the class plays a significant role in students getting the most important things in life. 이해가 안됩니다. 문장구조가 좀 어긋나신거같아요. My view on this issue is that, lessons learn outside of class offers a prominent role in allowing the students to learn the most important things in life. This is because students can broaden their social connections and out looks 한단어에요. outlooks, also they can develop their social skills.
말한것도없는데 처음부터 moreover 사용해주시면 곤란하죠. Mover over First of all, it is beneficial for students to enhance their horizon to active outside class.?? There are various experiences to learn more useful things. ??To be specific, students can interact with a variety of people, and visit many interesting places. Unlike in a class room, through these activities, they can learn not only academic lessons, but also valuable and precious experiences. Moreover, these experiences will help students to advance in life. Here is my experience as an example. I often travel abroad, and in there and, I can make many friends from different culture and get much knowledge 고친겁니다.in ways that does not involve school. These experiences encourage me to become a 당황스럽네요. 갑자기이런게 나오기엔.. diplomatic officer. These experiences help me to shape my personality to become a diplomatic officer in the future. In this regard, activities done outside class help students succeed in life. ^^
Beside, students can develop social skills outside class. In these days, social skills are essential for students to have a great life. Group activities are more available outside class than inside. Extracurricular and club involve many activities that require us to collective efforts??. Therefore, while attending these activities, students can get social skills naturally. To be specific, they learn how to work and cooperate as a team. Soccer game is a good example. Participating in soccer game, students can know how to cooperate, compete and coordinate with others. They cheer for teammates, pass the ball to one another, and strive together to win the game. Given this, by attending many group activities, students can work in teams, socialize with others, and become desirable and sound members of society.^^
In To conclude, I firmly believe that outside of the class room is the best place for students to get the most important thing in life. This is because students can widen horizon, social network and foster their social skills.
영어 타자가 느리고 오타가 많이 나는데 자판 연습을 하면 좀 좋아질까요? ㅠ
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