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음....저는 일단 많이 써본 축이 아니라 형식같은 점에 중점을 두시고 첨삭 부탁드릴께요~^^
There are two choices for new doctors. They can either work in the urban area or in the rural area. The article briefly suggests three ideas why city is better for doctors than country. However as what the speaker has stated, working in the rural area also has lots of benefit.
There is definitely a financial support in the country. According to the article, new doctors who has student loan debt prefer becoming doctor in the city because of the higher salary. However, if the government gives supports to them, they would not have to worry about it. Also, eventhough income they get in the rural area is small, the cost of living in the country is lower.
The advanced technology in IT, especially in the internet allows new doctors to get recent informations from the medical community. They do not have to feel isolated or stressed about the feeling that if they are being dull about new skills.
Country is attactive enough to lure doctors to come. Not all doctors like splendid and eventful city. They might hate the noise and all the eye soaring light of the buildings. Therefore, on the contrast of the article, some doctors like the slow-paced country. Especially if they are born in the country.
Stating that all every doctors prefer urban area is a tilted opinion. If there are city lovers on one side, there must be country lovers on the other side too.