On top of that, getting evaluation from students, teaches will encourage to make a better lesson with more preparation. It is obvious that everyone want to get good evaluation and reputation from others, because individual have to concern about other people in order to be recognized. In other words, teachers will try harder to get a great comment by using different methods. For example, they can utilize visual aids or video clips to attract students with more interesting topic. Also, they can research the best way to transmit their knowledge to students in easier way. The best illustration of this phenomenon is my uncle , Helen. She used to be a highschool chemistry teacher , and she put a lot of her energy and effort for the lecture during the evaluation period. Specifically, she made a funny chant to memorize the periodic table. This new innovative chant was really attractive to students, because they had to just memorize the whole thing previously . The result is, fortunately, Helen got a reward as a best teacher of the year in her school, and every her student received really good score on the quiz about the periodic tables.
On top of that, getting evaluation from students, teaches will encourage to make a better lesson with more preparation. This is because teachers want to get a good evaluation from others, and they believe that this is really great opportunity for them to be recognized by peers. It is obvious that everyone want to get good evaluation and reputation from others because it is very rewarding to be recognized as the best in one's field. In other words, how the other people think about them is very big deal, due to the fact that others have to judge teachers by their quality of lecture. Specifically good teachers and bad teacher is not depends on their knowledge, and the most essential part is how they can deliver to students effectively and efficienty , and it is their duty and the reason why they are existe.d
Therefore, teachers will try harder to get a great comment by using different methods in oder to express their teaching skills and knowledge which cannot be shown by just seeing them. (여기서 쓰고싶은내용이요, 사람을 딱 봤을때, 좋은 선생님인지 아닌지 평가 할수없기 때문에, 그들의 능력과 teaching skill을 평가할수 있는 단 한가지의 방법의 그들의 lesson을 보는것밖게 없다 , 따라서 선생님들은 자신의 능력을 인정받고, 좋은 평가를 받기 위해 lesson 을 개선한다 이건데 ㅠㅠ 잘 표현이 됬나요?) For example, they can utilize visual aids or video clips to attract students with more interesting topic. Also, they can research the best way to transmit their knowledge to students in easier way. The best illustration of this phenomenon is my uncle , Helen. She used to be a highschool chemistry teacher and she put a lot of her energy and effort for the lecture after the school started to adopt the evaluation system. Specifically, she made a funny chant to memorize the periodic table. This new innovative chant was really attractive to students, because they had to just memorize the whole thing previously . The result is, fortunately, Helen got a reward as a best teacher of the year in her school, and every her student received really good score on the quiz about the periodic tables.
처음과 비교했을 땐, 많은 걸 쓰려고 노력은 했어요.
근데 자기가 표현하려는 건, 배경 한 두 줄이면 다 해결 될 걸 하나 하나 일일이 열거해서 설명했네요.
teacher가 학생에게 왜 좋은 평가를 받아야 하는데? 이런 질문에 reputation이 좋아지고, 그런 건 적긴 했는데, 그정도만 해도 아까보단 나아요. 그렇지만 배경 한 두줄만 쓰면 되는 걸 괜히 서포팅하려고 문장을 계속 더 쓰게 되는 거죠. 그냥 우리는 평가 받는 사회이고, 좋지 못한 평가를 받지 못하면 teacher로서의 자신감 문제도 생기고, 그러니까 에세이가 응용이 안 되는 거죠. 평범하게 누구나 생각할 수 있는 걸 서포팅 하려고 하면 아까 보단 서포팅을 더 하려고 했으니까, 점수가 1, 2점 정도는 오를 수 있지만, 10%에서 걸리죠. 더 좋은 에세이를 쓰고 더 좋은 배경을 쓸 줄 아는 사람한테 best 점수를 주고, 이렇게 필요 없는 문장을 계속 서포팅하는 것은, 나름대로 무엇을 말하려고 서포팅을 열심히 하긴 했지만, 한 눈에 안 들어와서 make sense하기가 어려울 수도 있어요. 좋은 배경 하나만 있어도, 여러 가지 예 들을 수 있고, 짧게 짧게 써서 똑 같은 점수 만들 수 있는데 굳이 이렇게 길게 써서 뭐해요?
분명 처음 보다 나은 건 사실이지만, 정확하게 왜 평가 되어야 하는지에 대해서 자신이 말하려는 걸 정확하게 설득하지는 못했어요. 에세이는 남을 설득하기 위해서 쓰는 거지, 쉽고 좋고, 아 누가 좋은 거 누가 몰라?, 왜 그런지를 자기만에 생각을 적기 위해서 배경을 좀더 좁혀 달라는 말이에요.
물론 토플 점수 빨리 만들고 끝내야 하는 상황이라면, 짧게 쓰는 연습으로 가는 게 나아요. 책도 많이 읽어야 하고, 보고 들언 거, 자신이 경험한 것 등을 써서 좋은 점수 만들려면 오래 걸리긴 하죠.
열심히 했어요. 아까 보다 확실히 낫긴 하지만, 저렇게 해서 설득하려면, 앞으로 계속 시험 볼 때마다 저렇게 일일이 서포팅 해야한다는 거 생각하고, 되도록 짧게 쓰도록 노력해서 설득하려고 해보세요.
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