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Today, we can travel all around the wolrd where we want to to owing to the advances of transportation. In addition, since the goverment of many countries have been enlarging the policy of imigration to thier citizens, we could live in where we would like to. Hence, I think that it is a good opportunity to move out of their native village for the following reassons.
First, once we travel foreign country for a long time, we can experience a lage number of nwe things that we have not been experienced in our native country ago. All the things which we commuicate with the natives and experience the various cultures of other countries help us to windened our horizons.
Secondly, it is a chance to get to know lots of various people that live ohter cities or countries. We can help other region's friends when they need our help, and they can do the same for us. This activity makes our relationship close between them and us.
In this sense, I firmly believe that people who move out of thier native village or town are good for our fufure lives in comparison with living in thier hometown.
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