Some people might said say that animals cannot give some key for understanding the distinctiveness of human because they are very different which that they cannot perform critical thinking, have no fear of death, and more. But However(But을 문장 시작할때 쓰는건 좋지 않아요) there are clear evidence that can be prove that some of human nature can be understand through animals behavior, and that is my standing point for two main reasons: some animals play a similar trait of human, and some of them shows very same feature of behavior.
The chief argument of my inclination is that the ants show one of human trait through their a life style which is forming a society in order to live and people have to live in group for survival. to survive. Furthermore, making society to cooperate is much beneficial for a lucrative life which we can further study further about human nature. For instance, underground, any types of ants form their community to be better resist at predator and amount collect food??. This is much same reason of why our ancestor has begun to live in society which is better defense of opponent groups of people and preserve more food by hunting larger animals still, people today form group of company, organizations, or government under much similar reasons.한 문장이 너무 깁니다. 두 문장 정도로 나눠주세여~ Actually this hypothesis came from one scientist who major in ant science. The scientist, Poll hoped to better understanding understand of begins of human "co-habitation" and he found the answer from the purpose of ants' society???. (This clearly shows that study of animal help to better grasp of human nature.)이런 거 꼭 써줘야 하는 건가요.>? 마지막에 thesis 반복 하는거요,,써줘도 되고 안 써줘도됩니다.
Another important aspect of this is similar behavior of infants. To be specific, most infant especially ape's infants were showed similar action pattern of human babies. through this The scientist can give better hypothesis of human babies. For example, before the psychology team in Seoul National University in Korea has commenced to observing observe monkey infant, could not give there were no any clear answers on questions concerning the human infants. The One of question is this whether the human babies recognize their mother with which kinds of reasons. The one monkey infant could give clear answer. The monkey secluded with his mother for a while and feed milk with surrogate mother who made by cold iron and scientists also provided other types of surrogate mother which has no milk rather coverd by the smooth fur. Monkey drink milk from fake iron mother and play around both of surrogate mothers but eventually scientists put the ugly and loud sound of monster in the cage, the monkey ran to fake mother which covered by the fur and try to find safety shelter near the fur-mother. Via this experiment, scientist can knew how the human baby recognized their mother by touch.
In conclusion, the similar traits and inner nature behavior shows that we can know more about human nature by studying animals. Human is not unique living thing on the earth. Hence people should stop to being much pride themselves.
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